so a severed head rolls across the floor and hits your foot. you look down and say, "Jesus!"

or not.

i'm editing page proofs, and i noticed that three of my characters use the same Jesus exclamation in different dramatic situations. this must stop. what would you say if a severed head rolled across the floor in front of you?


holy shit!

holy crap!


?????

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"What the F&*k!!!" & then I would run like hell!!!!
are you going for 200 or can I stop thinking?
Well, it's been a couple months now...I wanna know what she decided to use? :-D

Have enjoyed reading all these responses immensely, by the way. Not sure what I'd say or gurgle in such a situation. Anyway, I have carpeting so the head probably wouldn't roll very well unless someone actually pitched it with some force like a bowling ball.

Anyway, "Jesus H. Tapdancing Christ!" works for me.
A situation that graphic and startling...

How about "Goodness gracious gravy!"

You could leave off the exclamation point if you found it too strong or shocking.
I think if a severed head rolled towards me, I'd probably take a couple of steps back, run up to it, kick it as hard as possible through a nearby doorway and shout... GOAL!! Unless I missed of course! And then realising I had squelchy goo on my best white trainers, I'd mutter..."Oh Shite!" as I realised I'd kicked my ex-wife's head...

Only kidding...
update on jesus.

several of my characters were saying jesus in various situations, so i used more than one of the suggestions. i'm not sure, but i think my choices were son of a bitch, goddamn, holy shit, christ, bloody hell. others i really liked such as fuck me, fuck, christ on a bike, bugger me, but knew the characters wouldn't say that.

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